如何让你的申请信更有气场

申请信是写信人就某一职位或学位或项目活动等向收信人提出请求。作为一种正规的信件，申请信的语言要即有礼貌又有专业水准。

【高考真题】（2012全国大纲卷）

假定你是李华，从互联网(the Internet)上得知一个国际中学生组织将在新加坡(Singapore)举办夏令营，欢迎各国学生参加。请写一封电子邮件申请参加。

内容主要包括：

1. 自我介绍(包括英语能力)； 2. 参加意图(介绍中国、了解其他国家)； 3. 希望获准。

注意：1. 词数100左右； 2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯； 3. 邮件开头和结尾已为你写好。

Dear Sir or Madam,

Regards,

Li Hua

【学生作文】

Dear Sir or Madam，

I’m Li Hua. I am a middle school student from China. I have learned from the Internet that an international middle school organization will organize a summer camp in Singapore and you welcome all countries’ students. I’d like to apply for this chance. Now let me introduce myself to you.

I’m Li Hua. I am a middle school student. I have many strength, especially English. I have learned English for 10 years. And I can communicate with foreigners in English. Besides, I can tell the students from other countries about China and learn their countries. I wish you will consider me and accept me as one of the members.

Looking forward to your early reply.

Regards,

Li Hua

【教师点评】

此篇习作基本按照申请信的格式要求去写，也基本覆盖了所要求的全部要点，对自己的写信目的和意图、自己的特点和决心也能表达出来，也用到了一些好的词汇和短语，如apply for, communicate with等，但是文章语言组织不是特别理想，个别地方重复，还有语言错误，从而影响了整体效果。本文还有很多提高的空间，可以属于第三档。

【教师修改】

1. 内容重复现象：第一段和第二段的自我介绍出现了两次，可把第二段的“I’m Li Hua. I am a middle school student.”删掉。

2. 第一段在获知这个消息时，可再补加你对这个活动的感觉，即你是否感兴趣（I’m interested in it），然后再写申请，这样不至于显得突然。

3. all countries’ students表达不太地道，应改成：the students from all the countries。

4. 第二段的many strength名词变复数形式。

5. “I have learned English for 10 years”最好有现在完成进行时态，说明“learn”这个动作仍在继续中。

6. 既然体现自己的强项，那么“And I can communicate with foreigners in English”此句中最好带上一个“流利地”副词(freely 或者fluently)，才能和strength一致。

7. “I can tell the students from other countries about China and learn their countries”此句中最好带上一个承接词，“同时；也”之类的，如and meanwhile或结尾处用as well。

8. “I wish you will consider me…”这句话是语法错误，用would。或者用hope来替代。

【修改后的文章】

Dear Sir or Madam,

I’m Li Hua. I am a middle school student from China. I have learned from the Internet that an international middle school organization will organize a summer camp in Singapore and you welcome the students form other countries. I’m interested in it and I’d like to apply for this chance.

I have many strengths, especially English. I have been learning English for 10 years. And I can communicate with foreigners in English fluently. Besides, I can tell the students from other countries about China and meanwhile learn their countries. I wish you would consider me and accept me as one of the members.

Looking forward to your early reply.

Regards,

Li Hua

【参考范文】

Dear Sir or Madam,

I’m Li Hua, a middle school student from China. I read the announcement of the summer camp that you have posted on the Internet and I am interested in it. I know that you welcome students from different countries and I’d like to take part in it. I’ve been learning English for 10 years, and I speak fluent English. What is more, I’ll be able to tell students from other countries about China and learn about their countries as well. I hope I will be accepted as a member of your summer camp.

Looking forward to your reply!

Regards,

Li Hua

【申请信写作指导】

进入职场第一道关可能就是如何写申请信，近几年高考试卷也连续出现了写英语申请信的英语作文。

1. 申请信正文部分主要包括内容(除书信结构外)

（1） 介绍消息来源

介绍消息来源是申请信或求职信正文部分的开篇交待句，它可使申请信显得自然、顺畅；而不介绍消息来源，会使收信人感到意外、突然，文章也缺乏过度、照应。

（2） 表明申请求职心意

介绍完消息来源，应向收信人表明自己的心愿，即写信的目的。

（3） 介绍个人简历并摆出自己的优势

干好这份工作需要经验、实力，因此，介绍个人简历必不可少。同时，申请人还要表明自己除了具有一定的工作经历之外，还具有一定的优势和特长，这样才能稳操胜券。

（4） 提出申请或求职打算

表明自己的决心是很有必要的一个环节，这可以赢得对方对你的信任。

（5） 表示感谢并请求答复联系

无论录取与否，都要表示感谢，以体现申请信的礼貌。

2. 申请信或求职书信常用句型如下：

I read in the newspaper that ... ;

I’d like to get this job； I want to apply for the job； I think I’m fit for the position ... ;

I’m qualified for the job/position；

I’m writing the letter to apply for it;

I think I’m the right person for the position;

I’d like to be a volunteer as ... ;

I have much experience in ... ;

I have learned bookkeeping, typing and pubic relationship；

I am writing the letter to recommend myself as a ... ;

I once worked as... for some time ... ;

Should you give me an interview, I would be grateful；

I’m very lucky enough if I’m accepted;

If you know more about me, please contact me at ...；

Thanks for considering my application and I’m looking forward to your reply;

If you need to know any more about me, please contact me at ...；

I hope to have the pleasure of an interview.

【即兴练笔】

假如你校这个周末将举行50年校庆，团委会发出通知要招聘一批自愿者，要求如下：

1. 具有为校庆服务的热情，能为各方来宾做好服务工作；

2. 对学校历史比较了解，有较好的沟通能力，是学校文化的传播者；

3. 普通话化标准，英语较好；

4. 身体健康，周末每天工作8个小时。

假如你是李华，具备以上条件，请用英语写一封申请信。词数120左右。不算已经给出的开头和结尾。

参考词汇：50年校庆the 50th anniversary of our school；标准的standard

Dear Sir or Madam,

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

One possible version:

Dear Sir or Madam，

Firstly, thank you four your time to read my letter. With the coming of the 50th anniversary of our school, I’d like to be a volunteer. I will try my best to serve our distinguished guests from different parts with great enthusiasm.

I have a good understanding of our school, including its culture and management and so on. I’m sure I will not only offer good service to our guests, but I will act as an excellent communicator of our school’s culture. What’s more, I can speak standard Chinese and English. I’m in good health and I have no trouble in working 8 hours a day this coming weekend. I will value this chance and do all I can if I’m accepted.

Looking forward to your early reply.

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua