漫画作文写作步骤和要领点拨

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漫画作文写作步骤和要领点拨

李春 江苏省常州市前黄高级中学湖塘校区 高级教师

漫画作文是一种开放程度较高的文体，该文体需要考生在读懂漫画的基础上，对漫画所反映的现象进行描写，并且就此现象发表自己的看法和提出解决此现象的一些方法和措施。

下图反映的是网络时代所出现的一种问题，有些孩子沉溺于网上交流而忽视了与父母的沟通。请你根据对该漫画的理解用英语写一篇短文。该文应包含以下要点：

1. 该漫画告诉了我们什么；

2. 你对此现象的看法；

3. 我们该如何主动和父母亲沟通。

注意：1. 表达时要适当发挥想象，不要仅做简单描述。

2. 词数150左右。开头已经写好，不计入总词数。

3. 文中不得提及本人的相关信息。

参考词汇：漫画caricature。

Modern technology has many advantages. While we enjoy the fun and convenience of the Internet, we also experience some new problems. This caricature describes one of them.

步骤一、就画论画

对于漫画作文写作时要进行的第一步骤是就画论画，所谓就画论画就是针对漫画所反映出来的表面内容进行描写，这一部分不需要进行太过详尽的描写，否则反而容易给人罗嗦的感觉，比如上面的漫画中，有学生详细写道：From the caricature we can see a boy and his mother. The boy’s mother, who wants to talk with the boy, is standing behind him. However, the boy so busy chatting online that he doesn’t want to stop to talk with his mother. So he says, “Can’t talk now ― I’m chatting”, with the other hand tapping quickly on the keyboard. This makes his mother surprised and angry.

应该说这段文字的描写并没有错误，用词都是正确的，但是这样的写法显然太过累赘，对于图片的描述我们不需要使用长篇大论将图片中的每个细节都写得很详细，甚至还加上自己的想象。实际上，我们只需要用很简洁的语言来描述出图片的内容即可，如：

The picture shows that a teenage boy is so engaged in chatting online that he refuses to chat with his mother.

（这段文字十分简短，但是却将漫画所要反映的内容都涵盖在内了。）

步骤二、透过漫画谈现象

漫画写作的第二步是需要将漫画中的内容联系我们的生活实际，从而揭示出图片所赞扬或批评的社会现象，这是十分重要的一步，这也是为我们后面发表看法和提出改进措施奠定坚实基础的。这一步骤主要是将图片中所反映的社会现象进行概括，通常漫画中所反映出来的现象是比较容易概括的，但是也需要注意不能马虎大意而导致偏题情况的出现，如上图中所反映的社会现象，有学生概括为：学生网络成瘾，从而对他们的成长造成了很大的危害。这显然是没有仔细审题造成的，上题中的要求中明确指明了是有些孩子沉溺于网上交流而忽视了与父母的沟通，因此，正确概括漫画所反映的现象也是十分重要的一个步骤，如本漫画中所反映的社会现象可以这样概括：

This caricature reflects a common phenomenon that many children are addicted to Internet chatting, while, at the same time, they ignore communication with their parents. This phenomenon is especially common in a family where there exists a generation gap between parents and children. These children prefer to live in a virtual world and just take their parents’ love and care for granted in everyday life.

（所谓社会现象的概括就是对图片内容的进一步升华和总结。）

步骤三、针对现象谈看法

针对第二步中所概括的现象，我需要进行适当的评论，提出我们自己对于这一现象的看法，如上图中的这位男孩他这种沉迷网络聊天而忽略了现实生活中和父母的交流这种做法显然是不对的，我们可以通过谈论这种做法造成的不良后果来表达我们对这种做法的态度和看法，因此，针对这幅漫画我们可以给出这样的看法：

If they continue to do so, they will get separated from their peers and family members, which, I think, will do great harm to their growth.

（针对现象的看法要合情合理，言之成理，点评恰到好处即可，尽量避免提出一些惊人的看法。）

步骤四、结合看法提建议

最后一个步骤是在前三个步骤的基础上总结性地提出一些针对该现象的改进措施或建议，这一步骤是结合了第三步骤中的看法，提出一些合理化的建议以此来纠正漫画中的现象所反映出来的种种问题，这些建议要紧紧围绕问题的解决，切忌讳空洞地喊口号，比如本文中有同学写道：It is very important for us to communicate with our parents, for communication can help create a better home environment. Only by communicating with our parents can we know each other better and can we make contributions to building a harmonious society.

这一段文字的用词用句都相当不错，但是只是空洞地强调了与父母交流的重要，实际上根据试题的要求，这一部分要求考生谈一谈我们该如何主动和父母亲沟通，因此我们写作的重点应该放在如何主动与父母沟通的具体措施上来，而不是空动地强调交流或沟通的重要性，交流和沟通的重要性可以谈论，但是最终还是要回归到具体措施的写作上来，比如我们可以提出如下的两个具体措施：

As far as I am concerned, it is better for us to share our joys and sorrows with our parents so that we can have a better mutual understanding and this will help create a happier home environment. Besides, whenever we encounter some difficulties, we can ask our parents for advice.

（措施具体化，内容需实在，切忌空洞的口号式措施。）

One possible version:

Modern technology has many advantages. While we enjoy the fun and convenience of the Internet, we also experience some new problems. This caricature describes one of them. The picture shows that a teenage boy is so engaged in chatting online that he refuses to chat with his mother. This caricature reflects a common phenomenon that many children are addicted to Internet chatting, while, at the same time, they ignore communication with their parents. This phenomenon is especially common in a family where there exists a generation gap between parents and children. These children prefer to live in a virtual world and just take their parents’ love and care for granted in everyday life. If they continue to do so, they will get separated from their peers and family members, which, I think, will do great harm to their growth.

As far as I am concerned, it is better for us to share our joys and sorrows with our parents so that we can have a better mutual understanding and this will help create a happier home environment. Besides, whenever we encounter some difficulties, we can ask our parents for advice. With our efforts, I am sure the relationship between parents and children will improve a lot and generation gaps will no longer exist.

同步训练：

下图描述的是现在许多学校教育的现状。请你根据对下面这幅漫画的理解用用语写一篇短文，描述一下其所反映的现象，分析该现象的错误所在并对如何纠正错误发表你个人的看法。

注意：

1. 仔细品味图中所反映的现象，要适当发挥想象，不要做简单描述。

2. 词数150左右。开头和结尾已经写好，不计入总词数。

3. 作文中不得提及考生所在学校和本人姓名。

From the picture, we can see that ________________________________________________

_______________________________. I believe by doing so, things will become better and better.

One possible version：

From the picture, we can see that many branches of a tree, which stand for different kinds of abilities in school education, have been cut off by a strong saw. Only the smaller branch “study” is reserved.

It in fact reflects an educational practice in some schools, where the goal of education is limited to study only. To make room and save time for study, activities for developing students’ organizing ability, communicating ability, practicing ability and so on are all considered unimportant and hence removed.

In my personally view, this kind of education is quite unqualified. A good education should focus on one’s overall development. Therefore, necessary measures must be taken to stop this kind of education. On one hand, education authorities must change their evaluation standards to guide schools back into the correct direction. On the other hand, students themselves should be responsible for their own development and seize every opportunity to broaden their abilities. I believe by doing so, things will be better and better.